Sunday, September 15, 2019
Tok Essay Can We Trust Our Emotions in the Pursuit of Knowledge?
Grade awarded: B Criterion A6 Criterion B7 Criterion C6 Criterion D7 Total26 This is a good essay. Despite some localized difficulties (for example, lines 10ââ¬â11, confusion with the truth tests, line 76, error with ââ¬Å"a prioriâ⬠) there is some sense of personal engagement and the essay does consistently identify relevant knowledge issues. Criterion A: Understanding knowledge issues Mark awarded: 6 The essay is consistently relevant to the title and there is evidence of real ambition and some attempt to use profound ideas (specifically Godelââ¬â¢s ideas (lines 20ââ¬â26) and the evolutionary ideas of lines 96ââ¬â97).However, the ideas are not always used effectively; there is clearly some understanding but it falls short of a ââ¬Å"goodâ⬠understanding. In particular, there is awareness that the idea of ââ¬Å"truthâ⬠is problematic (for example, the introduction and lines 18ââ¬â19) and its meaning is explored in different areas of knowledge (ma thematics, art, history, ethics, religion) and everyday events (the Iraq war, the table), but the handling of the issue is uneven and at times inconsistent. Criterion B: Knowerââ¬â¢s perspective Mark awarded: 7The essay has a clear student voice, starting with an engaging introduction which understandsââ¬âbut is not prepared to countenanceââ¬âtotal skepticism; despite the clumsy formulation (lines 4ââ¬â5) one senses an awareness of alternative perspectives and a personal stand. The examples are appropriate, varied and reasonably effective (for example, lines 31ââ¬â33, the gamelan; lines 20ââ¬â26, a brave, if not entirely successful, attempt to concisely explain Godelââ¬â¢s ideas; lines 51ââ¬â55, Texan law; lines 56ââ¬â75, Iraq; lines 39ââ¬â41, Hiroshima and Nagasaki).The quality and quantity show that the student can independently link the ideas to personal, academic and real-life situations, and are a strong feature of this essay. Criterion C: Quality of analysis of knowledge issues Mark awarded: 6 The analysis of issues is weaker than their identification, and the precise links between ââ¬Å"contextâ⬠and ââ¬Å"truthâ⬠are not specified (for example, the examples of the gamelan and Dawkins are both potentially rich but undeveloped).While there is a sense of exploring the idea of truth in different contexts, the inquiry lacks depth and detail, and some conclusions are not adequately supported (for example, line 18, the conclusion ââ¬Å"Howeverâ⬠¦ contextsâ⬠is supported by examples from non-mathematical contexts; line 13, ââ¬Å"make four becauseâ⬠¦Ã¢â¬ is an apparently unaware argument from authority; lines 20ââ¬â26, Godelââ¬â¢s ideas are not used adequately; lines 28ââ¬â30, ââ¬Å"Perceptionsâ⬠¦ view and placeâ⬠is asserted rather than argued for).It might be argued that the extensive treatment of the Iraq war, while certainly showcasing the studentââ¬â¢s perspective o n the issue, might be somewhat polemical rather than carefully argued. Claims of ââ¬Å"emotive language, colourfulâ⬠¦ fallaciesâ⬠(lines 67ââ¬â68) are not elaborated upon and, in the overall picture of the essay, this example seems to contradict the overall conclusion that ââ¬Å"Margaret Atwood was right when she said that context is allâ⬠(line 101). Criterion D: Organization of ideas
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